江蘇省沭陽(yáng)如東中學(xué)高考英語(yǔ)一輪復(fù)習(xí)作文指導(dǎo) 課件(共22張PPT) .ppt

高三英語(yǔ)作文講評(píng)高三英語(yǔ)作文講評(píng) Rudong Senior High school Hua Haiyan 3Analysis & DiscussionCorrection& Polishing upPresentation & Comment123TASKS：WritingWriting最近，調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生有了心理問(wèn)題，這引起了社會(huì)的極大關(guān)注。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所提最近，調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生有了心理問(wèn)題，這引起了社會(huì)的極大關(guān)注。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章，向?qū)W校英語(yǔ)廣播站投稿。供的信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章，向?qū)W校英語(yǔ)廣播站投稿。 最近，調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生有了心理問(wèn)題，這引起了社會(huì)的最近，調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生有了心理問(wèn)題，這引起了社會(huì)的極大關(guān)注。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章，向?qū)W校英極大關(guān)注。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章，向?qū)W校英語(yǔ)廣播站投稿。語(yǔ)廣播站投稿。 Task 1：Analysis & Discussion注意：注意：（1）對(duì)所給要點(diǎn)逐一陳述，適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，不要簡(jiǎn)單翻譯。）對(duì)所給要點(diǎn)逐一陳述，適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，不要簡(jiǎn)單翻譯。（2）詞數(shù)）詞數(shù)150左右。開頭已經(jīng)寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。左右。開頭已經(jīng)寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。 Nowadays, an increasing number of students are suffering from mental problems, which has aroused public concern. According to a survey conducted recently, _問(wèn)題問(wèn)題有心理健康問(wèn)題的學(xué)生：男生占總數(shù)的有心理健康問(wèn)題的學(xué)生：男生占總數(shù)的16.2% ，女生，女生占占11.4% 。情緒問(wèn)題：如過(guò)度焦慮、自卑情緒問(wèn)題：如過(guò)度焦慮、自卑行為問(wèn)題：如撒謊、偷竊行為問(wèn)題：如撒謊、偷竊 原因原因父母過(guò)多懲罰、過(guò)分干涉、家庭不和睦父母過(guò)多懲罰、過(guò)分干涉、家庭不和睦自身學(xué)習(xí)壓力過(guò)大、與周圍的人際關(guān)系不融洽自身學(xué)習(xí)壓力過(guò)大、與周圍的人際關(guān)系不融洽建議建議不少于兩點(diǎn)。不少于兩點(diǎn)。最近，調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生有了心理問(wèn)題，這引起了社會(huì)的極大關(guān)注。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所提最近，調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生有了心理問(wèn)題，這引起了社會(huì)的極大關(guān)注。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章，向?qū)W校英語(yǔ)廣播站投稿。供的信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章，向?qū)W校英語(yǔ)廣播站投稿。 Task 1: Analysis & DiscussionParagraph 1: Phrases1.情緒問(wèn)題情緒問(wèn)題 / 行為問(wèn)題行為問(wèn)題2. 過(guò)度焦慮過(guò)度焦慮3. 自卑自卑 4. 撒謊、偷竊撒謊、偷竊emotion / emotional problems behavior / behavioral problems be excessively anxious show excessive anxiety lack confidence feel inferior to otherstell lies / commit theft最近，調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生有了心理問(wèn)題，這引起了社會(huì)的極大關(guān)注。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所提最近，調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生有了心理問(wèn)題，這引起了社會(huì)的極大關(guān)注。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章，向?qū)W校英語(yǔ)廣播站投稿。供的信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章，向?qū)W校英語(yǔ)廣播站投稿。 Paragraph1: Sentences如何拓展句子？如何拓展句子？-補(bǔ)充句子成分，如補(bǔ)充句子成分，如定語(yǔ)、狀語(yǔ)定語(yǔ)、狀語(yǔ)等；等；-使用使用復(fù)合句、非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞復(fù)合句、非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞等；等；-補(bǔ)充內(nèi)容信息，如補(bǔ)充內(nèi)容信息，如目的、結(jié)果、條件、原因目的、結(jié)果、條件、原因等。等。Paragraph 1: Sentences情緒問(wèn)題：焦慮、自卑；情緒問(wèn)題：焦慮、自卑；.行為問(wèn)題：撒謊、偷竊；行為問(wèn)題：撒謊、偷竊；. 1._, some students become too anxious about their future.（原因）（原因） 2. Some students cant handle anxiety properly, _ _. (結(jié)果）結(jié)果） 3. With mental problems, many teenagers have bad behaviors _ (舉例）舉例） For lack of confidencewhich makes it difficult for them to be confidentthus contributing to their emotional problem.such as telling lies and committing theft最近，調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生有了心理問(wèn)題，這引起了社會(huì)的極大關(guān)注。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所提最近，調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生有了心理問(wèn)題，這引起了社會(huì)的極大關(guān)注。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章，向?qū)W校英語(yǔ)廣播站投稿。供的信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章，向?qū)W校英語(yǔ)廣播站投稿。 Sample：Nowadays, an increasing number of students are suffering from mental problems, which has aroused public concern. According to a survey conducted recently, among the students who suffer from mental problems, boys account for about 16.2% while girls make up 11.4%. In terms of emotional problems, many students are excessively anxious, lack self-confidence or get angry easily. As for behavior problems, some students tend to tell lies and commit theft and some even withdraw from people and the world around them. 最近，調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生有了心理問(wèn)題，這引起了社會(huì)的極大關(guān)注。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所提最近，調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生有了心理問(wèn)題，這引起了社會(huì)的極大關(guān)注。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章，向?qū)W校英語(yǔ)廣播站投稿。供的信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章，向?qū)W校英語(yǔ)廣播站投稿。 Appreciation:1. Among students who have mental problems, boys make up 16.2% while girls account for 11.4%. It is common that they suffer from many emotional and behavior problems .Too much anxiety and lack of confidence lead to emotional problems, which make them feel they are inferior to others. Whats worse, some of them often tell lies, commit theft, consequently ending up in prison. （張紀(jì)（張紀(jì))2.Among all kinds of problems, excessive anxiety and loss of confidence become the most serious emotional problems, which directly lead to some behavioral problems, such as lying ,stealing .These bad behaviors will have a bad effect on their life. (朱可心）朱可心） Paragraph 2: Reasons 1. 1.父母過(guò)多懲罰、過(guò)分干涉、家庭不和睦父母過(guò)多懲罰、過(guò)分干涉、家庭不和睦Students are often punished severely by parents if they fail to do as instructed, which causes a tense family relationship. Parents interfere in their studies and life too much, thus making them unable to get along well with their children. There are many reasons lying behind the problem. Several factors contribute to the worrying situation. 最近，調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生有了心理問(wèn)題，這引起了社會(huì)的極大關(guān)注。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所提最近，調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生有了心理問(wèn)題，這引起了社會(huì)的極大關(guān)注。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章，向?qū)W校英語(yǔ)廣播站投稿。供的信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章，向?qū)W校英語(yǔ)廣播站投稿。 Burdened with too much pressure, students are unwilling to communicate with people around. Suffering from heavy pressure from school and family, students always find it hard to get along well with people around./ to live in harmony with others. 2.自身學(xué)習(xí)壓力過(guò)大、與周圍的人際關(guān)系不融洽自身學(xué)習(xí)壓力過(guò)大、與周圍的人際關(guān)系不融洽最近，調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生有了心理問(wèn)題，這引起了社會(huì)的極大關(guān)注。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所提最近，調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生有了心理問(wèn)題，這引起了社會(huì)的極大關(guān)注。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章，向?qū)W校英語(yǔ)廣播站投稿。供的信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章，向?qū)W校英語(yǔ)廣播站投稿。 Polish up the paragraph:Parents are very strict and punish them too much. They often interfere in their studies and life . There is a tense family relationship. Students have great pressure from study and can not get along well with others. All these bring about their mental problems. 最近，調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生有了心理問(wèn)題，這引起了社會(huì)的極大關(guān)注。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所提最近，調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生有了心理問(wèn)題，這引起了社會(huì)的極大關(guān)注。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章，向?qū)W校英語(yǔ)廣播站投稿。供的信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章，向?qū)W校英語(yǔ)廣播站投稿。 Appreciation1.父母過(guò)多懲罰、過(guò)分干涉、家庭不和睦父母過(guò)多懲罰、過(guò)分干涉、家庭不和睦2.自身學(xué)習(xí)壓力過(guò)大、與周圍的人際關(guān)系不融洽自身學(xué)習(xí)壓力過(guò)大、與周圍的人際關(guān)系不融洽Various factors may account for the worrying situation. For one thing, parents tend to punish their children too often for their poor academic performance and excessively interfere in their childrens life and study, which undoubtedly makes it impossible to build a harmonious family. For another, heavy burden from their school work and lack of communication with people around may be an invitation to their mental problems. 最近，調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生有了心理問(wèn)題，這引起了社會(huì)的極大關(guān)注。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所提最近，調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生有了心理問(wèn)題，這引起了社會(huì)的極大關(guān)注。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章，向?qū)W校英語(yǔ)廣播站投稿。供的信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章，向?qū)W校英語(yǔ)廣播站投稿。 Paragraph 3: SuggestionsAs adults, parents_. teachers_ _ .As students, we _. are supposed to create a harmonious atmosphere are expected to play an important role in helping students/ give them guidanceought to take a positive attitude strike a balance between study and relaxation. So severe is the problem that we must find effective solutions as quickly as possible.最近，調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生有了心理問(wèn)題，這引起了社會(huì)的極大關(guān)注。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所提最近，調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生有了心理問(wèn)題，這引起了社會(huì)的極大關(guān)注。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章，向?qū)W校英語(yǔ)廣播站投稿。供的信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章，向?qū)W校英語(yǔ)廣播站投稿。 Appreciation In my opinion, it is high time to take measures before everything becomes too late. As adults, parents should understand their children and create a harmonious atmosphere for them so that they can live happily. Teachers also play an important role in helping students face challenges bravely. But most importantly, teenagers themselves should take a positive attitude towards life, learning to strike a balance between study and relaxation. As long as we join forces, our effort will pay off finally. Work in groups of four to correct your composition and polish it up, trying to use what youve learned in this period. Task 2: Polishing up your own composition最近，調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生有了心理問(wèn)題，這引起了社會(huì)的極大關(guān)注。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所提最近，調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生有了心理問(wèn)題，這引起了社會(huì)的極大關(guān)注。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章，向?qū)W校英語(yǔ)廣播站投稿。供的信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章，向?qū)W校英語(yǔ)廣播站投稿。 Task 3: Presentation & Comment1. Language ( words ; phrases; sentences ; fluency; accuracy)2. Content 3. Linking words (coherency 連貫連貫)4. Handwriting What makes a good article ?Required contents Proper structureWide range of vocabulary Appropriate use of transitionBeautiful handwriting最近，調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生有了心理問(wèn)題，這引起了社會(huì)的極大關(guān)注。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所提最近，調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生有了心理問(wèn)題，這引起了社會(huì)的極大關(guān)注。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章，向?qū)W校英語(yǔ)廣播站投稿。供的信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章，向?qū)W校英語(yǔ)廣播站投稿。 Consolidation:假如你是某校學(xué)生張華，最近一位名叫假如你是某校學(xué)生張華，最近一位名叫Mike的加拿大學(xué)的加拿大學(xué)生來(lái)你班學(xué)習(xí)?，F(xiàn)在，他正為融入新的集體感到苦惱。生來(lái)你班學(xué)習(xí)?，F(xiàn)在，他正為融入新的集體感到苦惱。請(qǐng)根據(jù)下表所列要點(diǎn)用英語(yǔ)給他發(fā)一個(gè)電子郵件：請(qǐng)根據(jù)下表所列要點(diǎn)用英語(yǔ)給他發(fā)一個(gè)電子郵件： 分析原因分析原因1.1.語(yǔ)言不通；語(yǔ)言不通； 2.2.文化差異；文化差異； 3. 3. 提出建議提出建議1.1. 多交朋友多交朋友 2. 2. 遇事求助遇事求助3. . 3. . 提供幫助提供幫助至少兩點(diǎn)至少兩點(diǎn)最近，調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生有了心理問(wèn)題，這引起了社會(huì)的極大關(guān)注。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所提最近，調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生有了心理問(wèn)題，這引起了社會(huì)的極大關(guān)注。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章，向?qū)W校英語(yǔ)廣播站投稿。供的信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章，向?qū)W校英語(yǔ)廣播站投稿。 Assignment:1. Correct your composition and find out several good sentences in it. 2. Practice writing another composition. 最近，調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生有了心理問(wèn)題，這引起了社會(huì)的極大關(guān)注。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所提最近，調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生有了心理問(wèn)題，這引起了社會(huì)的極大關(guān)注。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章，向?qū)W校英語(yǔ)廣播站投稿。供的信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章，向?qū)W校英語(yǔ)廣播站投稿。 Thanks for your cooperation !最近，調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生有了心理問(wèn)題，這引起了社會(huì)的極大關(guān)注。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所提最近，調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生有了心理問(wèn)題，這引起了社會(huì)的極大關(guān)注。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章，向?qū)W校英語(yǔ)廣播站投稿。供的信息用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章，向?qū)W校英語(yǔ)廣播站投稿。